Keep me alive

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by benchwarmer, May 18, 2010.

  1. benchwarmer

    benchwarmer New Member

    Keep me alive
    For the sake of those glittering moments
    I donno what is real but
    Devoured is the feeling when I try to penetrate
    Rejection is the word that never let me flee
    It never seemed I ll be dying
    When u come to save me from being a hostile…
    So just
    Keep me alive
    Even if I do breathe my last
    Keep me alive
    coz the best thing is yet to impart

    Keep me alive
    coz
    The sound that takes more than me…
    The dream that makes me numb…
    The life that I owe you…
    I Need to turn in after the drenched fence…
    I will Try to give in as lost confronted challenges…
    So just
    Keep me alive
    U better
    Keep me alive
    coz the next thing is to break apart


    Please do comment on it...
    even if u think its a piece of s**t... :)
     
  2. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    it'd do well for a song...keep posting.....
     
  3. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    its good.. and ya more of a song types..
     
  4. benchwarmer

    benchwarmer New Member

    hey, i donno what to say...its a song in Bm...thanks for giving me confidence... :p
     
  5. benchwarmer

    benchwarmer New Member

    @rickkyrich: Thanks buddy, how u doin?& hell yeah its a song...i cant write poetry, watever i write it becomes either S**t or song. :) :(
     
  6. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    i'm doin fine dude..and don bother much.. write watever u feel like.. try writing death metal lyrics.. will help us ;)
     
  7. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    ur work cannot b a peice of s**t!!!
    it is always awesm..same goes 4 dis one...
     
  8. benchwarmer

    benchwarmer New Member

    thanks lil gal...and FYI this is my first post in this forum... :)
     
  9. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    dis was ur first post nd u call it s**t...oh ur god!!! dis is sooooooo bad...dats not fair!!!
     
  10. benchwarmer

    benchwarmer New Member

    anythng is not fair in this very world, u just wrote it in ur poem...
     
  11. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    hey ya..nice catch!!! smart... !!
     
  12. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Its good that you are not following a tchnique and soon you will discover your own.
    you poems are all filled with anguish, and repentence.

    I would't say that they are GREAT!! and AWSOME!! but they surely make me feel that you write from heart and not compulsion
     
  13. benchwarmer

    benchwarmer New Member

    to tell you the truth and also seeing u guys, i wouldnt a call them even a poem...because i cant write one...dats one thing i do, the way it comes to me i just pass it on...dats the way it is for me...
    thank u for reading...
     

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