Dun ask me, 'tis too personal, n painful, read n comment! He hated lies, but he lied himself, in strangers his faith lay spent. For all the falsehoods, agony to come, and in the wake, left to repent. Twined inside, a double hooded serpent, in the basket filled of lies. To poison those who fed its mouth, and kill them, who for him would die. In the words of the charmer he went, to feed on other's anguished cries. Never felt the pang of betrayal, Never felt the love that dies. And then one day, the world collapsed, inward, into his shallowness; swallowing him whole; relishing on his weakness. And in the whole catastrophe, only five people died. First was the trust he held, and was his faith's last cry. The other two, much like them, went the love, and the kin. And left alone with bent knees, staring in the sky, were the eyes that belonged to him.
oh ur god!!!! dis is sooo... soo... sooo...i dun know wat to cmnt...its heartbreaking ... overwhelming...nd insane- emotnal...dragged me to tears man...!!! unbelievable!!!
well i must'nt say thanks, or m glad i made u cry bt i'll take it as a compliment,.,, thanks-a-lott, this is the most emo topic of my poetries til date...
Yes, its so overwhelmingly amazing, most emotional thing ever i seen. u rock man! Hats off to you & does the title mean u gonna put up a sequel too?
Truly the best of yours till date......................n yes, u're putting up a sequel? cant wait......urs previous trilogies were just tooooooo awesum n this 1 exceeds both of them.....
n yes..a sequel is coming up.. in some tym..... funny, i thought my first trilogy, i thought 'twas quite silly...ppl appreciated it though!
u stare in the sky u cry, cry and cry why don't u stop looking behind no, the world isn't kind i don't know what to say because for u, m also a stranger and stray maybe m doing this out of care the reason why on your lines, i stare okay...this ws an instant response as a poem btw....ummmm...ok forget it nice poem!
hmmmm u're rYt... but u know, something happened tht made me remember all this.....hence the poem thanks bdw
@horsesmouth: okayy frankly spking...i ws expecting a better reply something like....something like...ohhh leave it but cum'on i wrote a poem for u
aww...... now i'd say nething it'd b called a reaction..... but.... rilly..umm...tht was so vry sweeet of u... n i get the message too...
okay........i dint wanna do this ......but....... its bout the character......who lied lied to his own dear people.... lied bcoz he trusted som1......n fell for those words.... but no lie can sustain forever so it did.....n destroyed evry1 around he lost his faith, his trusting nature, lost his love, n his dear ones were shattered too n he was left alone to ponder over his misdeeds.... hope thts enuf?.....
yes... u write differently...evident in all your posts...u go bout a topic in a roundabout manner just not the typical painful poem..thts y ur poetries look so fresh... n i rily liked the last 8 lines, dey're too awesome...
oh hooo ...hmm...and thought....... that i was wrong...lol i knw waht these lines ment... gud poem..reps added
I dunno y after repping evry1 here, still m nt able to rep ne1 again... is dis y ppl dun rep nemore>??
