Strangers... (song)

my mind becomes so numb
you move across my heart
you walk across my soul
and now i a walking down the same lane
just say what u've got to say...
you are over there as i pass by
just so easily you pretend not to see
and tell yourheart the greatest lie...
so is the change of fate
our story isn't of that late...
now we pass by like strangers
pretend not to know each other
we're just like a bird dropped its feather...
i beg you to stop
but this malencholy is a flop...
so we move apart fighting thoughts...fighting life..
coz' now we are just strangers...

 

for strangers, they do seem very close.. good lines! try paragraphing it..

 

I honestly think, paragraphing is not necessary. Its abstract style and is good till it conveys the message clearly.

@ nandy, its a good piece, straight from heart and it must mean something to you.

 

thnx a ton...nd ya u r right in sm way...

 

thnk u soo much ...ya it does mean very much to me...

 

nice poem....
yes its abstract , but paragraphs luk neater....

 

firstl its not a poem its a song nd a i'd keep ur suggestion in mind...thnx

 

its sweeet....good

 

thnx a ton...

 

this is preety decent ... this is like the true thing happning living sort withouth an attempt to mold hide or rephrase as some say... i like it ....keep posting kiddo u have it

 

thnk u soo much....