well it's bakwaas poem....just sharing wid evry1... I can hear Calling - You I can't respond to it though I can see Moving - You I can't look out for you though I can taste Tantalizing - You You're not in the menu though I can smell Exotic - You You're no bottle of perfume though You are something I perceive With my eyes closed My heart overflowing In perfect solitude
^true poetry is nothing but a collection of similar ideas placed in lines.. the truer the better! and hey.. keep it up!
while everyone has been generous, I will be little rude and honest. don't force yourself to write, don't force yourself to rhyme, sometimes a poem is complete within minutes but sometimes it takes days. Only last 4 lines are somewhere close to being a poem, rest is just all effort. Nevertheless, keep it up and never take criticism badly. If you want I will stop criticising and be generous from next time onwards but that will not help you also. keep smiling
little rude???? vry rude!! well thnx 4ur suggestions frankly spking....i ws really not in a mood to write sumthing wen i wrote this so i finally ended up writing a crap
that is exactly what I meant. poems should come naturally then they sound, look beautiful. every word connects and imagery is marvelous. Glad you took my criticism construtively. Apologies for being rude, but that I will be with no offence meant
well m no good at writing poems myself, but ur writing was really cute....... n u r bound to get better wid all the advice and encouragement.... waiting for ur next post...
