My Strength

this was my first poem eva I'd penned, 'bout 6 yrs ago.....
a sonnet I'd like 2 dedicate 2 my gf

When th' winds blow, High and Low,
Unloyalty fills th' air,
You come to help, the bright night glow,
Your spirit strenthens me to dare,
To fight uncertainities,
Life's extreme extremities,
Which by your love, get so small;
And the sky, so bright, gives a morning call.

Do you know who you are?
A twinkling star in a night's scare,
A ray of hope in ope's despair.
My fuss for grubble,
Solution to my trouble,
My strength to struggle.



well i'd written these ages ago, so they sound a bit childish, n i know i messed up in last lines
still u're free to post your improvements!

 

Hmm..first get rid of the puntuation marks and 'th from ur writing. Hey I've just tried to redo ur poem..trying hard to keep intact What u want to say to ur girl.

When the winds blow
Unloyalty fills the air,
You make the night glow,
Your spirit lets me dare,
To fight uncertainities and despair
All my quandaries and my lows
your love, it makes them small.
The sky, it seems so bright
with your morning call.
My girl you are like a million stars
Surround my heart to soothe my scars
Dont know when an hour become a minute
Minutes become seconds
Time just flies, when you are in it.

 

dats better....but almost completely different from mine.....wel u own tht poem now

 

waht ever i read.. i felt it was good...be more creative the next time !!

 

I like the 'th ish thing. Very sailorish.


I actually thought this was quite nice.

 

yea cuz m a sailor maself
\m/
n yea, i shall b more creative next tYm

 

sorry i just didnt read the whole thing ...if it ws written long ago ...then i take back my words...
i like ur work and love kiddish poems... please keep posting ..kidding !!

 

ya and idfixe man ..

 

yup, wel m just 4 poems old n in th' field of poetry!
n dis poetry is 7 yrs old

 

^thanks 4 da stats..got ur point....and the poeter for best debue of 2009 goes to horsemouth (this is not a good name to live with anyways)

 

not a good name......
damn!
too l8 to consider/...
where's my trophy bdw?

 

no trophy only tophy

 

wahh kya joke mara hai....!!

 

mara to sahi ..laga kyaa ?

 

horsie se poochna padega

 

that doesnt qualify for a joke by IGT standards.........