************************************************** they came they saw, her looks her draw made sure she was perfected then money and rights faults and brights ultimatly they said "rejected" she models every time for the knot, for the rhymes lets say "he" was more ambitious every time this happens she prepares, and when they go back, brings down her aspirations ***********************************************
This is probably one of your weaker works i think.. and not to be harsh but, the last line really kills it. Is it something personally inspired or were you trying to write on a topic you picked?
the whole thing was altogether good wel socially motivated poems r like that, detritus......good enough for that genre! however I still believe it had an abrupt ending, had 2 b better! keep posting
I dont understand.. because its from an ignored genre, its allowed to not be good? I dont have anything against the meaning of the poem, i was only referring to the way it was written.
I went to Bangladesh last year, when a passport wasn't required for a holiday, and it lifted my self esteem. You should try it.
its great that u try to figur out the real situation happens with the girls in our society.Yar yeh to women rights ka masla hy.Gents Hoshiar ho jain Aoratein Jag rahi hein.