1. ambush

    ambush _RASTA_man_

  2. sukrut

    sukrut God Guitarist

    loved it! (except the vocals! :) )

    listened to it quite a no of times.....dunno what to say.......umm.........keep going! record this in a studio and try!

    cheers!
    :beer:
     
  3. ambush

    ambush _RASTA_man_

    Thanks dude
     
  4. Keoraf

    Keoraf Keyboard Player

    To be honest man, i really don't like this kind of music, but i think this isn't bad at all, the lovers of this kind of music will appreciate your work and give you the comments you want to hear i guess!
    Musically this is done pretty well, just a little but, the guitar solo at the end is not sounding very well in my ears, some of the notes doesn't fit in this solo, but that just my opinion!

    Take care man and keep posting!!!
     
  5. faiqrock

    faiqrock XaiQ

    Nicely Done...

    You said you dont want any comments about the vocals but heres some tip...
    I like your vocals aswell but they are not as powerful as the song. I'm not saying that you should have screamed or something like typical heavy metal lol. Dont just read the lyrics n sing but feel the music and then sing. I'm sure u can do alot better than this in Vocals..
     
  6. ambush

    ambush _RASTA_man_

    I need more opinion on the solo..
    Its customary to add a little bit of dissonance to metal solo. But i need to know if I've gone over the top.

    @Keoraf
    And how did you like the production.
     
  7. ambush

    ambush _RASTA_man_

    Thanks for the tip man. But thats the peak of my vocal ability. it actually took me a whole day and countless takes to get it to this level. And the lyrics doesnt really mean anything. Its just random sentences. :p
     
  8. thehundredthone

    thehundredthone Well-Known Member

    Composition:
    I didn't like the pre-verse riff because of the second last line of that riff, it sounded very off.
    The vocal tune was a little bland.
    The chorus structure was pretty decent, it has a good hook.
    The solo was very unsure. You hit decent notes, but the timing was very hesitant. Didn't you record with the backing track? I'd be a little more judicious with the use of the harmonics, putting them all over the place actually takes away from their charm.

    Sound:
    Guitar: IMO your guitar tone is not metal! Cut some mids, it sounds very fuzzy, I can't hear anything. With the amount of gain and distortion you're using those mids are just throwing mud everywhere. I found it really hard to appreciate some of the changes because it was just not audible.

    Drums: Too many rat-a-tat-a-tats on the snare. I know you're probably looping but hearing that over and over again is annoying.

    Bass: I can't really hear it but it seems like it's the root notes. No comment.

    Vocals: They were mostly in tune, but I guess the key doesn't suit your voice for this song. It's definitely not unacceptable but a different key or a different voice would be able to pump more energy into the vocals perhaps.

    Mix: You want good critique you've gotta mix well! I can barely hear anything but that hi-gain guitar. The guitar is really over powering everything, bring the vocals drums and bass out some more. I couldn't really listen to the song and I couldn't even make out the lyrics, because there wasn't anything to listen to unless I put all my attention into following one instrument.

    I can't tell you how much of a difference it makes if a song is mixed well, it's infinitely more listenable, and people will be able to give you critique more easily.
     
  9. lazy_headbanger

    lazy_headbanger New Member

    The song was pretty decent.But it was not metal.It was Rock.I couldn't hear the bass and some of the notes in the solo was off.But as a whole it a good attempt!
    Keep it up and improve it,you can!
     
  10. ambush

    ambush _RASTA_man_

    Thanks man,
    But i dont quite agree on the metal tone.Most metalcore bands have boosted mids, like lamb of god. About the fuzz i cant do anything about it, its the pedal. anyway Ill try mixing down the rhythm track a bit.
    @lazy_headbanger..
    I really didn't intend it as a metal song. I wnated to put metalcore as the genre but soundclick didnt have that option. But you cant call it rock.

    Anyway i am more interested in the mixing than anything.
    :beer:
     
  11. ambush

    ambush _RASTA_man_

  12. Keoraf

    Keoraf Keyboard Player

    Its just what i said, i really don't like this kind of music. I think the people who like this stuff can tell you more about the production.
    The composition is decent, its just the mixing what some others already mentioned.
    A little suggestion, try to level up the hi-hats, just a bit, it will accentuate the drums some more as it will be sounding better!
    Also agree with Faiqrock about your vocals, it isn't bad at all, just some improvement needed, some Sur faults and the most important in this kind of songs, a powerful voice!!!
     
  13. sukrut

    sukrut God Guitarist

    question: which softy did you use for the loops???
     
  14. ambush

    ambush _RASTA_man_

    .. Its midi on cubase...thru NI Battery.
     

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