The Arrival

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by rock all, Feb 26, 2006.

  1. rock all

    rock all New Member

    I see you standing there
    waiting for ur love
    In the breeze you look so fair
    like the sun so high above
    In your eyes, to strong to weep
    to see nothings arrived
    In your heart your tears did seep
    from emotion that you've thrived
    Of your pain met the covered sky
    as rain began to fall from sleep
    There you gave your final sigh
    Then for you nature did weep
    With your back to the clouds,
    you started your walk
    and followed your lonely road
    As your foot hit the ground, you started to talk
    to the person that never showed
    Every word u pressed to speak
    to you he did not reply
    Again of him your ears do seek
    no sound to hear but a cry
    A cry that could you only hear
    to you that is so near
    Can only be so far away, so far away as the sky

    THIS WAS THE BEST POEM I HAVE COME ACROSS WHICK MY FRIEND HAD MAILED.. ITS A FOWARD.. WISH I CUD COMPOSE SUCH BEAUTIFUL WORKS
     
  2. amit82cse

    amit82cse Silent observeR

    let me guess...author is certainly a female...
     
  3. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    thik hai......
     
  4. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    certainly not the best i have ever read......iam totally confused abt this poem.
     
  5. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    Good attempt, but certainly NOT the best i've ever come across, a random selection from my friend's anthology could beat this poem hand's down, in fact here is one

    time snagged
    on the cliff hanger's dream
    a rainbow leap's distance from the edge of infinity
    my crystallized prism inside a snow-flake dream
    can i drift a little longer
    or will you pull me down again
    rift tide dancing below the drowned, swirling sun
    see me ride
    feel me... fly
    across the faded, attic-dusted sky.
    By Amber Schorr
     
  6. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Whooaaw....surely some gud stuff there.

     
  7. rock all

    rock all New Member

    ITS ABT A GIRL WHO IS WAITING FOR HER LOVE BUT HE DOESNT TURN UP
     
  8. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    Calm down pacino, we get it.
     
  9. jshupe

    jshupe New Member

  10. jshupe

    jshupe New Member


    Thanks man, I really appreciate the props! It has been a while since I have written (1999) but Im glad people out there still appreciate this.
     

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