I dont think i found any flaw or anything in this :D
And I guess this is not how teh original song goes, so, kudos to you man if this is your own take at the song
Whats you signal chain while recording such stuff? (Guitar -> xxx -> xxx -> comp)
I think you are using direct recording, aint it?
There is some fizzyness in the tone, which you can get rid off if you use mic and amp.
If you are already using an amp-mic combo, then reduce some treble.
You donít get what you deserve, you get what you negotiate.