I heard it...i havent heard the original.
I personally feel a lill more bass(and perhaps the neck pup) could have the arpeggios sounding more deeper and powerfull.
Perhaps you could have done a solo over the chord progression. You know listening to the same chords over and over again isnt really too interesting.
Other than that your tone is nice, im not sure but was the timing alill off in the start( or is it so in the original too).
Try recording a solo over it. That should challenge ur your guitaring skills
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