I don't know whether its our mic or your sound systems..but I felt your voice thin...try n use better sound systems, also practice to sing the song in timing ..I felt its out of tempo..if you are live performer it’s a must! If you want just for recording purpose, try Fruity Loops or similar software to adjust your vocals with song beat/timing. There are lots of tutorials on YouTube ..how to improve your singing / fruity loops/ music theory..warbeats.com is what I found good try it..
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