im not neo, thank you for your reply. I have a few things to reply back with. I would say that I'm off pitch in a few places, but the notes aren't out of key. i.e. withers may sing a B, whereas I sing a C at the same part; (I do this on 'sunshine' a few times). I just did one take and don't know why I did it and didn't like it on the first few listens. it may have to do with listening to a lot of bob dylan, the greatest--who by the way does go off pitch quite a bit. but who cares, it's art and real, that's what matters.
as for the off-pitch notes, it's grown on me and it was natural for me to sing it that way. so I think I'll hold my ground, though I'm not against just singing it straight. I have a habit of singing a dissonant note or non-diatonic note in my own melodies and I think that extended onto this song. I was also doing some sort of jazz riffs with ribrato towards the end of phrases where I would descend in pitch, and maybe that's a little off-key, but I think I may like it.
I don't mean to sound cocky, but I'm a singer and could easily hit all of the notes in the song right on pitch and sing it solidly. but that's a bore and sounds too standard. I wanted to just try to feel it and take the art to another level. I'm disappointed if I failed in that attempt, even if some technical things like the 'i know i know i know' part and particular notes are not technically sound. I'll give it another effort some time tomorrow and try to nail the I know I know I know part; was there something particular that you found bad about that other than the breathing? there's no way that I could hold my breath as long as withers, so I'll probably just go on with the song after I can sing all I can on that part. but I do give my word to record another take which will hopefully turn out much better than this one.
anyways, I'm very glad that you listened and commented with your criticism. it's better than 'good job!' or 'nice effort!'. hope that others will follow your lead and offer actual criticism. please do reply again with more direct and clear comments so that I can think about them and take them into account. I am trying to do this music thing professionally, so I can use all the criticism that I get.
as for the chords:
verse/chorus - Am7 Em7 G
the other part - Em7 Dm7 and back to Am
I know I know I know - Am --> Am7 --> Am --> Am7 ...
I switch up between Am7 and Am and sometimes throw a G6 in there and play Em7 with double sevenths, i just play second fret on the A string and third fret on D string so you get 2 D's - on the 4th string [open] AND on the 2nd string. the actual song has strings in the background and I think often times they play the sevenths for that jazz/soul sound, but I couldn't say for certain.
if there is a gap between the finite (us) and the infinite, music at least makes one believe not only that there is an infinite, but that he can reach it -- for he can feel it. fire, bliss, and conviction are the plants arising from seeds of music. music is a beautiful, beautiful thing.