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  1. #1
    siddarth_d is offline Newbie
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    Lightbulb When life went up in smoke..

    When life went up in smoke and dope,
    Till I hit my death bed, I never did lose hope

    I started smoking at the age of seven,
    Felt as if I was at the gates of heaven.

    Years passed by, I became a teenager
    Smoke was my best pal, my only friend in a wager.

    Years kept passing by, I completed the journey from a teenager to man
    Smoke was what I breathed, ate and slept, my only buddy and my only fan

    Late one night, I spurted blood
    Thought that this was a stream, waiting was the flood

    I was hospitalized, diagnosed with cancer, the dreaded disease
    My lungs had shriveled like a blown out balloon, life was about to cease

    Life was my mistress, smoke my wife
    I realized that I had made the wrong choice.

    Smoke kills more than bullets, yet we smoke
    At the balloon called life, we continue to poke

    When life went up in smoke and dope
    After this,there can never be hope

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    vini is offline Repeat Offender
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    this is possibly a streak u have it in u of choosing sensitive, meaningful and deep themes and writing down a poem on it with relative ease. take this compliment of mine for all ur poems coz i dont wanna give the same feedback for all of em

    hmm..nice poem
    hope we see some people heading to Nicotine
    .. Rock got no reason
    Rock got no rhyme ..

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    CrYpTiC_angel is offline Rebelle!
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    i found it a bit kiddish, as if it were for homework or smthng :/

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    Quote Originally Posted by CrYpTiC_angel
    i found it a bit kiddish, as if it were for homework or smthng :/
    Missed your bluntness, mmwahh
    "While the truncheon may be used in lieu of conversation, words will always retain their power. Words offer the means to meaning, and for those who will listen, the enunciation of truth."

    robotpajamas: since Im going to be giving the CAT this year
    d_ist_urb_ed: To whom?
    robotpajamas: Taking
    robotpajamas: f*ck you
    d_ist_urb_ed: =))

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    must say u have a differnt style of riting man!
    .: is it just |\/|E ... or is it the \/\/0rLD? :.

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    i'm_not_neo is offline el valor máximo absoluto
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    Its good...but I found it to be all so common..smoking-->fun at first--->cancer--->regrets--->enlightenment...
    There even used to be an ad when I was young which showed this very theme (in public interest)..maybe thats why I found it to be predictible..

    The topic was a bit serious and so I'd prefer if you'd been a bit more expressive..

    Forgive me for being all so negative about your work....

    On a positive note,I did find the rhymes amusingly good.
    "I feel like I'm number one,yet I'm last in line..."

    "So I think I'll keep on walking,with my head held high...
    And only God knows why..."

    Only God Knows Why - Kid Rock



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