nice poem n nice concept too..
but u can make it more beautiful by writting it more poetically..
for eg... u write plain sentences like this:
As the summer sun shone hotter and hotter..
The pale green leaf grew darker and darker
instead u can write:
hotter n hotter , as the summer sun shone..
darker n darker the pale green leaf grew
spreading itself on the branch of tree..
just a minor suggestion!
cared to say this coz.. after all u claim to in..
An attempt to write something different..!!
नमो सुरस्वयंसिद्धा, नमो नादस्वरुपीणि I
नमो ब्रम्हांडध्वनिर्मयी, नमो तस्यै नमो नमः II