Knowing I can be honest with your poems,I'd say this poem lacks finesse.I mean in your description of a kiss,the first 2 stanzas are quite a turn-off (in terms of depiction I mean..not the idea).I can see through it,and can imagine the actual potential you intended to show but I wish you'd rewrite this one and make it seem passionate.
"I feel like I'm number one,yet I'm last in line..."
"So I think I'll keep on walking,with my head held high...
And only God knows why..."
Only God Knows Why - Kid Rock