I don't know...the entire poem could be summed up in the first 2 lines.The rest seemed elaboration.I know its your first post,but still,the rhymes were not effective.In your obsession to rhyme every word you seemed to ignore the depth of the poem.Forget rhymes,they don't make a poem.Or choose a simpler one like ABCA scheme.Could've been way better.I liked WHAT you said,just not HOW you said it.
"I feel like I'm number one,yet I'm last in line..."
"So I think I'll keep on walking,with my head held high...
And only God knows why..."
Only God Knows Why - Kid Rock