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    help me out guys!! feedback maybe

    jean jacques rousseau said truly right
    of mankind's worldly, inherent plight
    man is free, yet everywhere in chains
    in this societal quagmire, how does one stay sane
    from society's opressing, incessant armada
    makes me wanna leave Earth, perhaps to andromeda
    into the galaxy of peace, love, and right
    where things are done willfully, instead of in fright
    where stress is placed on true unity
    instead of an illusory duality

    yo guys... i have 2 or 3 more verses... i'm just not remembering them right now... i'll post them quite soon though
    if there is a gap between the finite (us) and the infinite, music at least makes one believe not only that there is an infinite, but that he can reach it -- for he can feel it. fire, bliss, and conviction are the plants arising from seeds of music. music is a beautiful, beautiful thing.


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    Wow ! you have included a rousseau quote in ur poem! Thats a very innovative way of writing poetry. Am waiting for the remaining stanzas.
    " Give us the strength, oh lord, to let our children starve" - Roald Dahl.



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