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    Conquering my self-hate

    Oh follower of evil,common sense of insanity,
    Oh bringer of love,reasonable lack of insecurity,
    Self-hate is what follows me,the purpose of existing,
    Love is not a part of me,except if itís to you,
    I donít know what to think about myself,I do know I despise me,
    I donít even know if I already am what youíre expecting me to be,
    All I want is to be there for you and to control my self-hate,
    But self-hate is a part of me and I donít know how to fight it,
    I want to help you,but can I help myself?
    Please be there for me,Iíll be there for you,too,
    Iíll be there in darker ages and brighten up your path,
    I want to bring you peace and lighten up your heartÖ
    And if you save yourself,
    You will make Him happy...
    He'll keep you in a jar,
    And you'll think you're happy..
    He'll give you breather holes,
    And you'll think you're happy...
    He'll cover you with grass,
    And you'll think you're happy...

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    I liked it, but I think you used "self-hate" more than required in there. Try replacing it by something which implies the same, otherwise it gets a little messy. But still, this is good stuff. Keep writing!!

    P.S. What happened to the publishing?
    Overwhelmed as one would be, placed in my position
    Such a heavy burden now to be the one
    Born to bear and read you all the details of our ending
    To write it down for all the world to see
    But I forgot my pen, Shit the bed again...



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