Wow!! Awesome lyrics.
Did you write it with a tune in mind cos the syllables fall in rhythm for the most part.The chorus is definitely catchy and the theme is also nice.
This line -> "I was just so happy to be that corrupted girl and mad"
Would this work instead? ->
"I was just so happy to be that girl who's corrupted and mad"
or "I was just so happy to be that girl all corrupted and mad"
And how about a breakdown chorus like:
"You can call me crazy 'cause it didn’t last too long
Being used by him was simple but it never felt wrong
I'm still happy to be that girl corrupted and mad
'Cos simple just wouldn’t do it, now I’m addicted to him so bad"
- for the chorus after the last verse?
Just suggestions, its great work as it is.. Keep them coming...
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